i was searching through the dense tropical rain forest. I saw an abandoned lost gold ancient pyramid. So i cautiously crept in the lost gold ancient pyramid. There’s was lots of laying around. I was lighthearted and i was jumping with joy that i found gold.
Next minute bang i was falling from the pyramid at 48 miles splat. I knew there was going to be sharp booby trap. They were mummies staring at me a thoughts rushing through my head i was trapped here so i talked in a nervously ball and i was shaking.
would i be here for ever?
June 16, 2020 at 4:59 am
Hi Cody,
Gosh, that story went from lighthearted and happy, to doom in a very short space of time!
I like how you described the mummies staring down at you and how you were shaking nervously.
Just remember to re-read and edit your writing as it wasn’t clear what was lying around in your first paragraph. (There was lots of ? laying around). I presume that it was gold?
Good work,
Michelle, Team 100wc,
Melbourne, Australia